Year 3 Writing Challenge

Dragonworld
This was their favourite time of day to fly.

As the glowing, crimson sun dipped down below the vast horizon, retreating to allow night to take its place, the dragons took flight.

The sky looked beautiful: wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings. Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained. Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

As they reached full speed, leaving the world far beneath them, they almost grinned as they thought about where they were going. There would be others like them there. It would be paradise…

Sentence challenge
As Year 3 will know, a simile is a way of describing something by comparing it to something else, often using the word “like” or “as.”

Can you identify any of the similes in this powerful piece of writing?

Can you create your own similes to use in your writing?

You could experiment using metaphors, or even personification to make your writing really exciting to read!

Don’t forget, you could use a thesaurus to find some real Wow words! Don’t forget to leave a positive comment on your classmate’s work too.

20 Comments

  1. Similes in sentences in the text

    The sky looked beautiful: wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings.

    Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained.

    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    Similes of my own

    The dragons darted in the blue sky like aeroplanes.

    The crimson sun shone like a star.

  2. Good work Emilio. What adjectives could we add in front of your nouns ‘aeroplanes’ and ‘star’ to improve it further?

  3. Similes in text

    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    Wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings.

    Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained.

    Similes of my own

    The dragons soared through the never-ending sky like giant scaly aeroplanes.

    The dragons darted around like a overexcited hooligan.

    The crimson sun was slowly descending like a deep red leaf from a tree in Autumn.

    Awesome similes Emilio, here is an example of a simile about how good your similes are.

    Emilio’s words leap from the page like a lion pouncing.

  4. Dragonworld

    The sky looked beautiful: wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings.
    Like sails from ancient ships,
    the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained.
    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    Aarons ideas.

    The moon looked like a huge round cheese.

    The fireworks were loud like snapping dragons

    The water was as clear as diamonds

  5. The skys clouds looks like a pillow of softness into the sky of light blue colour of paint, the clouds is like a smile of brightness made out of soft pillows.

  6. As the glowing, crimson sun dipped down below the vast horizon, retreating to allow night to take its place, the dragons took flight.

    wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings. Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained. Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    My similes are :

    -The clouds were soft as a pillow
    -The dragons skin was hard as a rock

  7. Jayden

    As the glowing, crimson sun dipped down below the vast horizon, retreating to allow night to take its place, the dragons took flight.

    wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings. Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained. Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    My similes are :

    -The clouds were soft as a pillow
    -The dragons skin was hard as a rock

  8. similes in the sentences in text

    Wisps of pillow like clouds seemed to part in front of them.
    They flexed their powerful wings like sails from ancient ships.
    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beast’s bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    similes of my own

    The water below glistened like twinkling diamonds.
    The sunset was as bright as a glowing fire.
    The dragons wings glided through the candy floss clouds.

    Jayden I like your simile : The dragons skin was as hard as a rock

  9. Similes in the text

    The sky looked beautiful: wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings.

    Like sails from ancient ships, the wings beat in the dying embers of the sun’s fire, embracing what little warmth remained.

    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts’ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    Similes of my own

    Her skin was as white as snow

    The grass was green like a emerald

    As cold as ice

    As snug as a bug in a rug

  10. As the glowing, crimson sun dipped down below the vast horizon.

    The sky looked beautiful:wisps of pillow-like clouds seemed to part in front of them as they flexed their powerful wings.Like sails from ancient ships.
    Thousands of tiny scales that covered the beasts ‘ bodies glistened like rubies in the dazzling light.

    As they reached full speed,leaving the world leaving the world far beneath them they almost grind as they thought about what they were going.

    Similes of my own

    The clouds were as soft as woolly blankets and were buoyant in the crimson sky.

    As the dragons stretched their wings they looked like sails from an old galeon ship.

    As their scales glistened in the moonlight like ripples on the shiny sea.

    They soured through the sky like gleaming rockets,towards their destination!

  11. The dragons looked as like they was as light as a feather as they floated above the candy floss clouds.The scales of the dragons sparkled like glitter as the remaining light of the dying sun beat down on them.,

  12. The dragons flew in the sky like huge eagols in the sky.
    The clouds were like cotton candy.
    The dragons`s horns were sharp as knifes

  13. The fierce dragons soared through the young night.They would not go near the sun but bold big and strong would.They were the most fierce

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