A Stone Age Setting

In class we have been working hard to give our writing the X factor. We have developed the skill of writing descriptive prepositional phrases in the hope of making our writing ‘POP’ for the reader.

Have a listen to our descriptions of a Stone Age campsite below and let us know what you think…..

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  1. Tired and confused,I followed Om to an odd camp. In the middle of the huge campsite,a sizzling fire belched out smoke. In the air, frosty,cold wind blows on my warm body. I’m the dark blue sky,the shimmering stars shine as bright as a million lights. A small baby is sleeping on a brown , silky blanket whilst tiny, sliver fish hang ready on wooden racks to smoke. The mirror-like lake glistens brightly between the gray,rocks. An innocent reindeer runs as fast as it could when it could see we were yelling and throwing our spears at it. The dark, green trees stand proudly in the freezing, black night. Loudly, the strange people talks about stories during the night.

    • Wonderfully descriptive! Check the tenses in the sentence which starts ‘An innocent reindeer…’

  2. Cold and tired,I walk with my new friend to a camp site.It is full of lots of thing but no metal, forks, spoons, knifes or houses.Only stone, wood, wool, animal skin and tents.She brought me to her family in a campsite and I figured out my is Om.I see a flickering embers from a campfire belching smoke,an innocent baby rests on a rough blanket.I also see a gleaming fish smoking on a timber rack and pearling spears.

  3. A innocent reindeer runs as fast as it could when it could see that we were yelling and throwing our spears at it.

  4. Tired but nervous ,I walk without towards a camp.There was a bright blazing fire that sizzles between the rocks.when I arrived,I could smell smoking fish hang near the wooden racks.The shimmering stars glow in the dark blue sky.Razor sharp spears rest next to the tools. As a sit down,I see the lake reflects below the tall hills.A furious ferocious bear wanders beetween the rocks.The lady sit infront of the burning fire.The innocent rainder runs in the distance of the hills.The small baby is sleeping on the brown silky blanket.I could hear the wind whistling in the cold air.The sunrise was as bright as the crackling fire.The unusual girl wanders around the ripped tent .

  5. Cold and full of worry I walk with Om towards a warm sizzling campfire. I see razor sharp speares hang between the rocks. I see a mirror like lake across the campsite. A member of Om’s family very kindly give me some stew. In the distance I see a group of furious bears.In the distance I see a innocent reindeer.A little further along I see the rest of Oms large family sitting on massive slabs of dusty grey rocks.The rest of the family prepareing the food for supper

  6. Om and myself, walk towards a odd campsite. As I arrive in the centre of the quiet camp, I see a huge roaring fire. There is a crowds of people and they are cocking some stew.They are roasting some dirty silver patterned fish that are hanging and smoking on a brown wooden rack. Quietly, the Lady is rocking her baby to sleep as the cold evening wind approaches the campsite.

  7. I walk around the camp with Om and we look at all the busy jobs that there are to do.The innocent reindeer gallops quietly in the long, green grass.The people are gathering silently whilst the warm, cosy fire crackles and the sparks disappear into thin air. The mirror-like river glistens and reflects the sky as the stars shine in the moonlight. The fire is crackling quietly near their settlements.A deep, dark cave makes scary noises that echoes inside of the scary cave.Brightly,the shimmering stars give light in the dark black sky.Camly, trees sway and swish in the blowing wind.The scarlet,red blanket is laying on the beige,shadowy soil.Gently, a baby sleeps on the red soft blanket.The fish are smoking on the wooden brown rack. The people are preparing logs helpfully whilst children gather around the campfire.There is a fire that crackles and the glowing sparks fly around everywhere that disappear into the night sky.

  8. Cold and sleepy, in the middle of the ruby,red campfire,I see a flickering bright fire with ashes floating high like a balloon up towards the beautiful sky.It also had glistening stars that lit up the sky brightly. Beyond the campfire,I caught sight of silver,wriggling fish smoking on old,wooden racks. Quietly I hear gentle lullabies coming from a mother carefully rocking her cute sleepy looking baby that was resting on a cosy blanket.Slowly,I look above me and I see the shiny,white moon that reflects it’s light in the turquoise,glossy lake. Unblelievebly, I see razor sharp spears that hang beside the hard, grey rocks. In the distance, I see an innocent brown deer eating emerald,long grass beside a short apple tree whilst hunters gather slowly towards it.

  9. Om and myself, walk towards a odd campsite. As I arrive in the centre of the quiet camp, I see a huge roaring fire. There is a crowds of people and they are cocking some stew.They are roasting some dirty silver patterned fish that are hanging and smoking on a brown wooden rack. Quietly, the Lady is rocking her baby to sleep as the cold evening wind approaches the campsite.

  10. I walk nervously,I see the sizzling burning fire. In the distance I see a lady putting her baby to sleep. I see a silver- wriggling fish hanging on a silver – birch sticks. I see the bright stars flicking in the bright sky. The mirror -like lake Reflects brightly between the rocks. The furious bear growls in the middle of the pitch black cave. I see the freshly skinned rest on black wooden racks. I see a lady serving food for me and om’s family.

  11. Tired and confused,I walk with Om towards some kind of camp. An unusual girl is wandering around the campsite. The silver fish are hanging down from the clothes hanger. The flickering fire burns in the middle of the campsite. The brown bear sleep in the dark cave. The shimmering stars rest in the dark blue sky.

  12. Chilly and confused, a girl is taking me a mysterious place. There is a belching fire rapidly spitting out loads of burning embers around the campsite. The blowing calmly flickers between the trees. The shimmering stars glow in the icy night sky as the sun slowly, vanishes into the horizon. There are wriggling silver fish dangling on a wooden birch sticks. Also in the emerald, green grass lay wooden pots full of delicious berries. The leather clothes are gracefully blowing in the wind.πŸ˜›πŸ”₯⚑️πŸ”₯⚑️

  13. I was lost and confused as I wandered into a crowded campsite.A bright,red fire crakeles noisy as people sit all around.Silvery, scaled fish hang in long lines on a wooden racks. An innocent baby sleeps quietly on a brown blanket as the sparkles in the moonlight sky. The unusual girl pointed at a large rock next to the warm fire, so I sat down.

  14. Tired and confused, I walk with Om until I come across her camp. I see a burning, roaring fire sizzle in the middle of the campsite. I can also see some shimmering stars in the dark misty sky . Sequinned, silver fish hang upon an old wooden rack. I see a little baby on her mothers snuggle lap.Suddenly , the evening wind blows through Oms hear as we approach are seats . Razor sharp spears hang beside the tent . In the distance, a mirror like lake catches my eyes whilst I walk towards it in shock because I can see a beautiful red fish, it is a fish I’ve never seen before .

  15. Slowly walk with Om to the talking camp fire. The wiggling sequkned fish spit roast on wooden racks piles. The shimmering stars flicker In the dusk sky. The Vicious bear pushes the boy in the solid rocks. The unusual girl wanders in the middle of the campsite. The Reindeer wanders in the deep grass. The razer sharp speers hang like soldiers next to the tools. The Mirror like lake reflect between the rocks. I went in a deep dark cold cave as Om was drawing a pitur of me.

  16. The blowing wind, calmly flickers between the trees whilst Om and I are roasting our hands near the fire.πŸ”₯πŸ”₯πŸ”₯πŸ”₯

  17. I was lost and confused as I wandered into a crowded campsite.A bright,red fire crackles noisy as people sit all around.Silvery, scaled fish hang in long lines on a wooden racks. An innocent baby sleeps quietly on a brown blanket as the sparkles in the moonlight sky. The unusual girl pointed at a large rock next to the warm fire, so I sat down.

  18. Tired and confused, I walked with on towards some kind an unusual girl wandering around the campsite. The fish are hanging down from the clothes hanger. The flickering fire burns In the middle of the campsite. The Brown bear sleeps in the dark cave. The shimmering Stars Rest in the dark dark blue sky.

  19. In the middle of the camp there was a flickering, roaring fire pushing smoke away into the dark blue sky covering the beautiful, shining stars. The drying fish smoked softly on the drying rack made from wood. The young, sleepy baby rests on the worm, cosy blanket made from soft animal skin. The old man is farming in the ginormous field. Myself and Om were talking about what we like to do in our spear time. Near the giant rocks there was a lady that separates the berries into different baskets. Near a giant rock, there was a innocent reindeer eating some grass. In the cave there is a giant, angry cave bear that roams the cave with beautiful paintings.

    • Fantastic boys! You showed great determination when faced with computer difficulties!
      Check your first sentence – add ad comma to show the first clause.

  20. In the middle of the campsite, beside the tent, a smoking fire crackuls., silver-wriggling fish hang on the silver birch sticks.after a while when it got dark the shimmiring dazzling stars in the sky shind .the littul baby fulls a sleep next to the fire. The boy and om wrere resting beside the fire too.πŸ˜€πŸ˜€πŸ˜…πŸ˜

  21. I enjoyed doing this it was a lot of fun and we were rewriting our story’s on the blog so everyone can see it right? πŸ™‚ πŸ˜€

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