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  1. his rectangular torso was larger than a house
    his great iron hands were longer than a truck
    his feet were shaped like a dust bin
    he stood taller than a apartment
    his arms covered with iron armour

    he was the iron man

    • Wow! That was fast Finley!
      I like your use of similes and comparison here! Top Tip – review the capital letters at the start of your sentences πŸ™‚

  2. 1. His rectangular torso shined bright in the glistening sunlight.
    2. His hollowed eyes turned red as he pulled me up.
    3. Water dripped around his metal arms as he fell.
    4. The tumbling waves tried to take him in the shining sea.
    5. He had a piercing, infa-red eyes glowed in the dark.

    • Hi Shaun

      Well done, some lovely sentences. I like you use of verbs i.e. hallowed

      Now try to craft a sentence using the structure
      adjective , noun, verb, prepositional phrase

  3. The iron man had a rectangular torso as big as a house! He stared at the horizon as his round eyes turned blue then red. The iron man looked into the mirror like ocean as his crab like fingers wiggled. As he descended down, his big, heavy iron foot made footprints in the sand. He was a giant, iron robot with hollow eyes that turned red, blue, white and any colour u could imagine.

    • Well done Hayley. Some interesting adjectives here.
      Top Tips – Upgrade your colours using a thesaurus – I’d review the words blue and red πŸ™‚

  4. The Iron Man’s hollow eyes colour changed whilst he toppled down to the sandy floor.
    The Iron Man’s torso was larger than the house.
    The Iron Man’s body was as strong as steel.
    The Iron Man stood as tall as a skyscraper!
    The Iron Man stood proudly at the brink of the cliff.

    • Some lovely sentence Chloe – good use of similes.
      Review one of your sentences so it flows like this adjective, noun, verb, adverb, prepositional phrase

  5. His eyes glowed bright,white
    His iron ears moved Side to side like a leaf
    His hands grew and grew
    His large feet shrank slowly

    • Hi Tilly,

      I like the description of the movements you have included here.
      Top Tip – add a prepositional phrase at the end.
      Adjective + Noun + Verb + Adverb + Prepositional phrase πŸ™‚

  6. His gigantic and monstrous head was shaped-like a dust bin but enormous as the titanic cruise ship.
    His eyes were intense, glittery, laser-like eyes scanned the gaping dusky horizon for any imaginable motion.
    His giant, metallic claw-like hands writhed at the ocean like a behemoth digging machines, searching desperately for his iron body parts.
    His powerful armed leg is unbreakable like a metallic rock-like iron robot.
    Iron man is as tall as a skyscraper standing fearlessly on the brink of the cliff.

    • You have some lovely descriptive ideas here Dwayne. Be careful not to use too many in each sentence.
      Stick to the the structure;
      adjective + noun + verb + adverb
      Have a go at another sentence and show me πŸ™‚

  7. On the brink of the rocky cliff, stood his colossal, iron body that was as tall as a house.
    His crab like fingers, scurried around between the bumpy rocks, searching for his scattered body parts.
    His piercing, red eyes glowed like a burning fire on a dark night.
    Stuck between two rocks, was the Iron Man’s gigantic, rectangular torso, that was as big as a house.
    Nested in a huge heap of gooey, red seaweed sat his eyeless, earless, enormous, iron head.

    • Well done Archie! These sentences are jam-packed with precise nouns, wow-verbs and similes! πŸ™‚
      If you’d like a challenge try to rehearse one sentence using this structure…

      adjective + adjective + noun + verb + adverb + prepositional phrase!

  8. The Iron Man’s torso was larger than a house.
    The Iron Man’s eyes changed colour as he toppled down the sandy floor.
    The Iron Man’s body was as hard and as dense as steel.
    The Iron Man stood as tall as a skyscraper!!!
    The Iron Man stood high and proud upon the bring of the cliff.

    • Well done Sarah, you are certainly a skilled simile writer πŸ™‚
      Remember – Stick to the the structure;
      adjective + noun + verb + adverb
      Have a go at another sentence and show me πŸ™‚

  9. His torso look like high rectangular building.
    The iron man fingers is like a crab.
    His head shape look like a massive lampshade.
    His red eye shape like traffic light.
    His arms were covered with metal.
    Iron Man torso is covered with metal.

    • Well done Lily! Some great use of similes here!

      Top Tip – write in the past tense in each sentence
      I.e. This torso looked like a high, rectangular building.

      Can you rehearse one of these sentences to show me you can use the past tense below? πŸ™‚

  10. The Iron Man had a torso as humongous as a mansion!
    The Iron Man’s fiery, fierce eyes looked out to the faraway sea as it flashed to different colours.
    The Iron Man was a towering giant with iron ears pointing out.
    The Iron Man’s arm was strong enough to pick up 30 cars, and his iron fingers wiggled like worms underground.
    The Iron Man stood courageously as he watched the flow of the gentle, azure waves.

  11. The Iron Man’s eyes were the colour of an inferno red like lava.
    His torso was big as 3 houses combined into one.
    His arms were long as roads that curved this way and that way.
    He had enormous feet that could crumble 5 cars stacked on each other.
    Iron Man stood there proudly listening to the peaceful, azure waves from the ocean.

    • Some lovely descriptive sentences Savion!
      I like your use of the expanded noun phrase ‘peaceful, azure waters’.
      Try to stick to the structure
      adjective + noun + verb + adverb
      Have a go at another sentence and show me πŸ™‚

  12. This torso looked like a high, rectangular building.

    His fingers looked like carbs.

    His head shape looked like a massive lampshade.

    His eyes looked like traffic light.

    His arms were covered with metal.

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