The Egyptian tomb
When the archaeologist Dan and his team found the Egyptian tomb door, then their hearts beat went faster in the mild dessert sun. They untied the knot slowly and carefully. Then the door made a rusty and screeching sound and when they went inside the door bang closed. They shivered because of the bang from the door.
Afterwards they were excited because they discovered boxes of gold, silver and diamonds also they found lots of jewels. After that they were amazed because they saw a mummified bodied wrapped in linen. There was lots of household items such as a large bed chairs and tables which were decorated with jewels and flowers made out of diamonds. There were paintings of him and his family and his achievements.
Dan and his team’s hearts pounded and pounded as if their hearts were going to jump out of their chests. Dans hands shook as he carefully started to unwind the rope. The rest of Dans team stood, looking over Dans shoulder with their sweaty hands and fluttering bellies. After what seemed like forever Dan had managed to untie the whole rope. The whole team took a deep breath as Dan gave the giant doors a little nudge because they had been closed for so many years, slowly the doors screeched and creaked opened, a cloud of dust fell all over Dans head. A bright light blinded Dan and his team, it was like the sun was shining from inside the tomb! They couldn’t believe their eyes! Everything around them twinkled and sparkled! Jewels glistened, gold shimmered and silver sparkled. There were beautiful statues of Egyptian gods and goddesses, there were amazing Egyptian paintings carved and painted all over the tombs walls and ceilings. But the most spectacular thing of all was the breath taking sarcophagus that lay before them, shining as brightly as a shooting star!
As the archaeologists opened the door they felt excited but frightened, the door made a loud CREEEEAK and CRUUNCH. Whilst one archaeologist was looking at the symbols on the stone wall, humming with his arms crossed, one of the other archaeologists looking at the tomb and questioned his friends “Why is their a dead end and who is going in?”
When the doors opened it smashed loudly.
When the door opened it banged against the wall and it chipped some
of wall,then the doors creaked slowly back to together. Dan was scared at first, then he was worried because it might cause a
cave in. His helpers thought why did l sign up for this.
Opening the doors
Dan stepped forward and grabbed the handles. Dan pulled the doors open cautiously. The doors creaked open.
Everyone gasped when they saw the treasure. The cave was very dusty but they could see twinkling treasure in the distance.
It looked like there was a sarcophagus in the middle. Dan recognised the shape. Dan’s helpers said this is why we signed up for this.
Good writing Jeremiah. I can just imagine the huge wooden door opening noisily and the fear of the men. I like the technique of repetitiveness ‘why did we sign up for this’ becoming ‘this is why we signed up for this’ Good job! 🙂
The atmosphere in the air was growing to the extreme! You could nearly hear the “bang, bang, bang” in the archaeologists hearts and “tick tok” in their heads. The door cracked as the ice breaks and they could hear a murmur of creeping mummies. Parts of sand whooshed like sandstorm. Achoo! Dan sneezed. Whilst Dan and the archaeologists pulled the door, everything muted whilst the hinges squeaked and squealed. Finally, when the door fully opened, precious paintings of the Pharaoh appeared to their eyes. Suddenly, out of nowhere they have heard the rustle of the scarabs armours pouring from the walls.
There were CREAKS and THUDS as Dan opened the old, rocky doors. It opened creepily, making a SWISHING sound in the darkness. When it was fully opened, it made a BANG and a CLUNK in the silence. When Dan looked inside the old, large tomb he was surprised. There was a shiny gold in front of him, and then he found golden statues left there thousands of years but it was still shining in the bright light from outside the door. Dan and his team of archaeologists were interested because they wanted to research about this. Inside the tomb, there were golden coins, golden statues, and gold. As the treasures gleamed very brightly, his fellow archaeologists and himself walked slowly into the tomb with feeling of excitement to start their research.